Days of March

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Wednesday night in bed, before falling asleep, I wrote a journal entry which read like a poem to sum up these days of March.

I tweaked it a bit after reading Victoria’s post at dVerse today.  She is asking poets to play with verb usage.

Not sure I hit it, but you can see my effort and original draft below…

My days are not my own,

winding, turning, twisting,

as they will-

so many things

beyond my control

determine what I’m doing, 

not doing.

My days blur-

sunlight through trees,

on a sunny morning…

fleeting.

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Published by enthusiasticallydawn

Dawn Paoletta is a life enthusiast who loves to juggle words, chug coffee, and journal excessively. You can find her gathering stones on the beach most mornings. She enjoys hanging out with her hubby, daughter and family pets in Narragansett, RI and shares her passion, poetry and prose @Enthusiastically, Dawn.

19 thoughts on “Days of March

    1. Yes, Dawn, determining would sound good. he poem, your creative juices are flowing. I use to write poetry

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  1. Life is truly a blur and they go too quickly it seems. And then they are a blur because they are so boooorrrrring and unmemorable….I am happy to find out I am not alone with days like these. dVerse really does get one thinking!

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  2. Ah.. to not own time is to live for now.. a journal of pleasing the past or the future.. may not always seem to be now.. the time is not yesterday or tomorrow or never now.. as without time there is simply.. always now..:)

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  3. This strikes home. I am bad about delaying my journal entries for a few days, and it’s always a struggle to see through the blur, after even just a couple of days. I do keep a pad by the bed for night thoughts and errant poetry. I take heart from the fact that if life’s a blur, then something must be happening! : )

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  4. Oh these lines really resonated with me!
    ‘so many things
    beyond my control
    determine what I’m doing,
    not doing.’
    there are so, so many things!
    Thanks for sharing this – showing the original is very cool!

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  5. fun challenge to play with verb usuage…I like blur because it can be a noun and verb…a verby noun! I always wonder which tense of a verb has the most impact…present, past or “ing” versions…I kind of felt the movement of the “ing” versions but also like the quick “punches” of the present tense version in your journal…kind of hitting me to wake up from the blur…and the blahs of March 🙂

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  6. Love it Dawn! I need to get my creative juices flowing and try to write more poetry…the truth is, I haven’t been writing much lately! Need to get my Tuesday @ Ten post written – the word is STRENGTH (I should be able to DO THIS ONE!!); and it’s time to see what the Five Minute Friday word is…oh, well!!

    Thanks for sharing your journal, your poetry!!

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