Fierceness in Time

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Tonight at dVerse Poets Pub I am sharing my own spontaneous response to a prompt shared by  Anthony Desmond. He  has given us eight original lines and asked us to have at them…in any way we like. The rule was we had to use three! I used more, and italicised them in the piece…

I struggle with prompts but was surprised where this led…when your words take you where you had never expected to go? Yeah, that! Enjoy, and stop over at dVerse to have at these 8 lines yourself. You never know where they will lead!


Fierceness in Time
Time is not a friend,
to most-
drag the shackles
tied to post,
sink your teeth
on warm flesh
turn back the clock
think not of rest.
She swoons,  "You flood me like a
lone streetlight
among the darkness."
silently approaching
from behind-
nape of neck...
she is stalking
the fluidity of your presence
for she has
craved images of you-
eyes riveted
on every movement
pads  through the streets
she lives again
and prowls the asphalt jungle
like a lioness
with belladonna in her eyes,
You said,
 "The heart makes the simplest things so damn complicated."
before your eyes closed,
to madness-
opened to her love
waltzed past the dead,
in their shade like shadow-
chasing the prey
who preyed
upon you
blind to the trap
she had set-
as she sinks her teeth
down on warm flesh,
turns back the clock
thinks not of rest.

Published by enthusiasticallydawn

Dawn Paoletta is a life enthusiast who loves to juggle words, chug coffee, and journal excessively. You can find her gathering stones on the beach most mornings. She enjoys hanging out with her hubby, daughter and family pets in Narragansett, RI and shares her passion, poetry and prose @Enthusiastically, Dawn.

18 thoughts on “Fierceness in Time

  1. Eeep. I think she is a bit of a vampire. She def has the allure going on, as you gave her quite the heat. That will fool many a person, right up til she sinks her teeth.


    1. I thought more about this last night, especially in the context of time being that vampire. And how do you fight that? Or do you give yourself over to it? Try to go with it and do the best that you can. Anyway, you had me thinking and doodling in my own notebook, so…


      1. X, ya know it’s weird because I did not set out with a vampire in mind at all…just a few jumbled thoughts and when I read it all afterwards…I am like holy moly what have I just written? AND I definitely saw that in the end…I am like- my vamp somehow morphed to vampire…it was a very fun challenge, and I like walking close to the edge…and you are right, who can take on time and win? Thanks for sharing with me. Notebooks are like best friends though, right? .


  2. The ending went darker than I thought ~ I don’t know if I am scared or thrilled by the madness of love ~

    Thanks for playing along Dawn & wishing you a good week ~


  3. So true that time is not a friend to most, but perhaps we should just be thankful that we have one more day… I especially like your last stanza. I find it very intensely riveting…thinking of chasing the prey who preyed on ‘you.’ I like your varied approach!


  4. The vampiress is there on one level, especially with cool lines like /waltzed past the dead/, but the piece is well layered too, & metaphorically, this hot bitch could be many other women, unleashing a monstrous lust, a pent-up emotion; strong sensuality for sure.


  5. I don’t get vampire in this at all. Truly, time is often not a friend to most but for those in pain, when it passes quickly, it is a best friend. Taking control of time…the last lines say so much. Taking control of time, of love….not being a victim of either.


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